Thanks so much for your incredible support with launching my pro-active quest to publish ME AND HER: a Memoir of Madness, my struggle and victory over Bipolar Disorder.
I received your awesome support with over 100 LIKES to that page ... http://karentyrrell.com/?p=2541
Last week I posted my dramatic opening page and you offered over 80 comments, begging to read more … http://karentyrrell.com/?p=927
Posting my memoir is the most gut-wrenching decision …
My personal life history on view.
I’m psyching myself to be brave … Here’s the NEWLY revised and amped Page 2 of ME AND HER: a Memoir of Madness …
‘Open up!’ demanded a deep voice. Two noses pressed up against the steamed up bathroom window.
‘I can’t. Not till I’m decent.’ I crept into the main room past my half-packed suitcase, the towel wrapped taut around me.
They might grab me and take me away. Then I ‘d never go home. I must stop them from coming in.
My mind raced with desperate plans. I rushed past the perfectly made bed and flung open the wardrobe, my fingers rifling through clothes sorted into sections with matching shoes underneath. Past purple, the colour of insight and imagination and jade green the colour of harmony and self-healing. Today I craved something stronger. Red ─ the colour of power and confidence.
I tugged on my cherry-red wool knit, black trousers with red pin stripes.Colour means everything! It can change my day!
My body froze behind the door, straining to listen. But too petrified to gaze through the peephole. My hand quivered as I unbolted the door. Slowly I turned the handle.
Oh no! Why the hell are they here?
Their uniforms, badges and guns, symbols of their power, screamed out at me. But I couldn’t fathom their names or their damn questions.
Someone brushed past. He yanked open the heavy curtains and the sliding door leading to the balcony. Glaring streams of light blinded me. The roar from the freeway rushed in, blaming me of terrible things.
Will they ever forgive me?
ME AND HER: a Memoir of Madness Karen Tyrrell 2011
What do you think of Page 2?
Are the first two pages gripping enough to pique your interest?
Can you *please* let the publishers know you really want to read ME AND HER: a Memoir of Madness?
Your personal support and encouragement will ensure this book goes to print 🙂
Thanks Carolyn, I hear your enthusiasm loud and clear!! 🙂
Works even better for me than the opening Karen. The only ? for me would be the bit about their badges of power, ‘screeching’ out to you. Although for the life of me I can’t think of a replacment word. Perhaps, ‘screaming out at me…or bombarding me…I couldn’t fathom’ etc etc. Anyway just my musings. I enjoyed the fast paced tension.
Thanks Dimity. Glad you liked my fast-paced tension. Originally I used the word ‘screaming’ and I changed it into ‘screeching’ just before posting. I’ll take another look. Thanks. 🙂
This is like a serial! Can’t wait to read more next week. Keep em coming, Karen. you’re an inspiration.
Hi Angela,
Glad you’re enjoying my memoir writing. I have a special *surprise* in store for next week. Stay tuned 🙂
Keep them coming Karen I am already waiting for next page. I agree you are an inspiration. Stay blessed.xx
Thanks so much Chris for dropping by. Love your enthusiastic response. I have something *special* for next week. Hope you’ll check it out 🙂
Wow, very powerful, Karen. I’m still hooked!
The only line that tripped me up: ‘Two noses pressed up against the steamed up bathroom window.’ For some reason I pictured two noses pressed up against the glass shower screen. Of course, that was my fault, not yours.
Thanks so much Jo, for your awesome support.
About the bathroom window … don’t know how to make it clearer yet … working on it 🙂
I’m just left hanging to see what happens next…. ARGH! I WANT MORE!!!! When will page three see the light of day?? And what colour will it be? lol
Yes, you certainly are brave. Congratulations to you. I think the world needs more people to be honest about where we’ve been and how we overcome our tough moments.
It is certainly captivating, and I too, am awaiting the next page.
Hi Simone, Thanks for your return visit. So glad I’ve hooked you in. LOL. Hope you’ll come back next week for a special “feature”. Interested ?
Hi Jackie, Fabulous to meet you here from “my little bookcase”. Thanks for your comment about honesty and being brave. Gets easier when people like you support me. Stay tuned … Next week I have a *surprise*. 🙂
Karen, I sense the tension in your opening and the intrigue you’re building. You’re pulling me in and I want to read more of your work.
Thanks Carol, for the interest and support you’re showing in my memoir … There’s more to come. Stay tuned 🙂
I love the P-A-C-E of it. I wanted more. Clothes anbd shoes laid out in order.
Hi Garry, so glad you Loved the Pace. About the clothes … I was very OCD about colors and neatness then … my wardrobe now is a mess. LOL. 🙂 More memoir writing to come this week. Please come back to check 🙂
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What a gripping second page! I too have bipolar disorder and your description of manic thoughts are right on target.
Thanks Mary so glad you enjoyed my second page and you can identify. I wanted to communicate my thought processes as I progressed through my different moods and stages. I have a short story on the “front” of my website http://karentyrrell.com/?p=2601 that you may want to check out too. A different time … a different head space.
Karen I must say this was very colorful indeed! I can appreciate the art of your writing because I can actually see what your saying and not just seeing words sit flat. Keep going Karen I applaud this, Glad I stopped in :0)
Ty
Thanks TyLeishia,
Really appreciate you checking out my opening pages. Your positive comment means so much to me … one memoir writer to another 🙂
More…More…More…Please don’t make me wait…More Please Karen! I’m hungry to hear what comes next? B x
Hi Bernadette, Thanks so much for chatting today and your follow up with checking out my memoir. I will Post page 3 sometime soon … at the right moment 🙂